DearSirorMadam:
ItismygreatpleasureampleasedtotorecommendQianWu,anexcellentan
exceptionalgraduatefromourdepartment,intoforyourPh.D.program.Asherclass
adviser,Iwasoneofthosewhoknowherbesgottoknowherwellt.Iamvery
delightedtorecommendsuchapromisinggirlasaworthycandidateforadmission
andfinancialaidstoyourgraduateschool.
QianWuisAstheClassPpresidentofherclass,thussheQianWuoftenhelpsme
managetheclass,givingmetheopportunitytointeractwithandobserveherskillsin
andIhavealotcontactwithherproficiently.Shecouldverywelltieinthe
completionofcompletingsomeclassactivities.Inmyview,sheisanindependent,
perseverantpersevering,yetcooperative,leadership,andcooperativegirl.
AmongOfallofthesehermanyoutstandingcharacteristics,heradaptable
adaptabilityandindependentindependencegivemeadeepimpressmethemost.In
2004,QianWushecametoourschoolfromKunming,whichisacityinsouthwest
ChinaandsofarfromBeijing.However,sShequicklyadaptedtocollegelifeand
learning.Thestudentsinourschoolareexcellentrankhighlyinacademicsandthe
competitionforgradesisfierceThankstoher.Therefore,sheworkssoharddiligent
onacademicclassstudyhabitsandexcellentacademicperformance,QianWu.With
anexcellentacademicperformance,shewasadmittedapprovedtostudyforaDouble
doubledegreeinPsychology.
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flowandeaseofreading.
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Comment[lal2]:Thissoftensthestatement
withoutdetractingfromyourrecommendation.
Comment[lal3]:Whileexcellentisgood,
exceptionalstandsout,risesabovetheordinary,
makingheranassettotheirprogram.
Comment[lal4]:Thecomparativeisn’tnecessary.
Youwereclose,youknowherwell;thatqualifies
youtorecommendher.
Comment[lal5]:Toomuchflowerypraiselooks
unprofessional.
Comment[lal6]:Typically,admissionsis
unrelatedtofinancialaid,soit’sbesttokeepthese
separate.Ifthecommitteefearsshecan’taffordthe
program,itmightaffecttheirdecision.
Comment[lal7]:Havingcontactwithhercould
meancounselingher.Thismakesitclearthatyour
vantagepointhasallowedyoutosuperviseher
performance.
Comment[lal8]:Independenceand
cooperativenesscanbeviewedasoppositional
characteristics,soit''simportanttodelineatethem.
Shecanbeboth,accordingtothesituation.
Comment[lal9]:Indent
Comment[lal10]:Newparagraphbecausethe
mainpointisgoingtoshiftfromalistofherassets
toaspecificexamplethat''sdifferentfromtheonein
thepreviousparagraph.
Comment[lal11]:Youmightwanttoconsider
offeringanexamplehere.Doesshecomefroma
ruralareaorsmalltown?Howhassheadaptedto
collegelife?Washerpreviouseducationlackingor
heroldstudyhabitspoor?Howdidsheadaptto
learning?
Comment[lal12]:Thisdemonstratesthatsheis
ahardworkerwhogetsresults,andthatshecan
successfullyhandleaheavyload.
Shestrikesmaintainsabalanceinbetweenacademicandextracurricularactivities,
whichisrarelyseeninuniversitystudents.MoreoverInaddition,shehashas
demonstratedstrongleadershipskillsby.Whensheservedservingascaptainofthe
NationalLibraryofYoungVolunteersAssociationofPUHSC,shehasanexcellent
performancewheresheexcelledatimplementingsuccessfulnewprograms.Every
weekend,sSheorganizedandleadedledvolunteerstotheNationalLibraryofChina
everyweekendtodoperformvaroiusvoluntaryservices,suchasprocessingpreparing
booksandfortheshelvingthemesprocessing,aswellashelpingreadersstudents
searchbooks.andarrangingbooksbackintotheoriginalposition.Becauseof
hBecauseofherexcellentperformancededicatedefforts,shewonwasawardedthe
titleof"OutstandingVolunteerofYoungVolunteersAssociationofPUHSC.".
QianWudemonstratedWhensheenteredintothegraduateschool,sheshowed
herresearchcapacityabilitiesingraduateschool.BecauseofherHerenthusiasmto
theforresearchandstrongperseverant,sheoutstandinglyperseverancehelped
completedhersuccessfullycompletetheprogram.Intheherlastacademicyear,she
receivedthe"SingleItemAward.".Inaddition,inordertoenrichherexperiencein
scientificresearch,sheusedsacrificedvacationtimetotakecompletesocialpractice
intheYunnanNationalLaboratoryPrimateCenterofChina.Becauseofher
demonstrateddeterminationtoachievehergoals,Shetoldmeshewantstobea
palmaryscientist,andIbelieveshewillspendalife-timeandefforttorealizefulfill
Comment[lal13]:Thisisanexcellentpoint,but
youmightwanttoexplainwhyit''simportantorwhy
it''srare.
Comment[lal14]:It’shelpfultoexplain
why/howshedidagoodjob.
Comment[lal15]:Thisisalittlesofter,making
itsoundmorelikehergoodworkwasrecognized
andlesslikeshediditonlytowinacompetition.
Comment[lal16]:Itmightbebesttospellthis
out.
Comment[lal17]:Shortersentenceswithmore
demonstrativeverbsreadmoredynamically.
Comment[lal18]:Itmightbeagoodideato
statethedegreesheearnedingraduateschool.
Comment[lal19]:Pleaseexplainwhatthis
awardis.
herdreamofbecomingapalmaryscientist.
AllofthesearethatIwouldliketosharewithyouaboutQianWu.Froman
educationperspective,IthinkQianWusheisthetypeofstudentwhocanwillgofar.
Notonlywillsheandbroadasanintegratedhumanbeingtofulfillheracademic
mission,butshewillalsoanduseherskillsandhersenseofsocialresponsibilityto
benefitthecommunity.Therefore,Iwouldliketosupportherfirmlyinherquestfor
moreadvancedstudiesinyourprogram,andstronglyrecommendhertoyouwithout
andreservation.Ifyouneedmoreinformationhaveanyquestionsconcerningherfor
meaboutQianWu,pleasecontactmefreelyatyourconvenience.
Sincerelyyours,
EDITORIALCOMMENTS:
Overall,thisisawell-written,heartyendorsementofastudentyouclearlybelieve
inandwithwhomyouhaveastrongbond.Givenyourpositionandtheclose
relationshipyouhavewithQianWu,yourrecommendationshouldcarryalotof
weight–particularlybecauseyouarefamiliarwithherstudyhabits,academic
achievementsand“job”performance.
ThebiggestissuewithyourletteristhefactthatEnglishisnotyourfirstlanguage.
It’salwaysagoodideatohaveanativespeakerlookoverformaldocumentsinorder
tocatchlittleerrorsinconjugation,wordchoiceorcommonphrasesthatsoundmore
Comment[lal20]:Thishelpswrapuptheidea
andtieinallthesupportingcommentsabouther
perseverance.
Comment[lal21]:Thistiesintothebalanceshe
maintainsbetweenacademicsandextra-curricular,
explaininghowanadvanceddegreewillbenefitnot
justaworthystudent,butthecommunityatlarge.
Comment[lal22]:Thisreadsmorestrongly.
natural.
Whileit’sprobablyrelated,Iwouldalsosuggestincorporatingmoresuccinct
languageinsomeareasandsofteningstatementsinothers.Forexample,the
differencebetweenwinningandbeingawardedseemsminor,butcanhaveasubtle
impactontheimpressionitmakes.
Finally,Ithelpsreadersunderstandyoursubjectifyouexplainwhysheis
excellent.Providingexamplestosupportthesuperlativeadjectivesisimportant.
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