2月26日更新by孙晨皓
作文练习五
假设你是Shirley。你的笔友李华和父母情有一点小矛盾，想要向你倾述。下面
是他给你的电子邮件。请你根据他的邮件内容写一封回信,谈谈你对这件事的看
法和理由，同时提出一些帮助他解决问题的建议。
DearShirley,
RecentlyIhadsometroublewithmyparents.Becausethemiddleterm
examinationisdrawingnear,theybothpushedmetodomylessonsandlockedmy
computer.Yousee,IhavekeptaQQpetonitthatneedstobefedoften.Ifeelvery
upset.Canyoubekindenoughtogivemesomesuggestions?
Yours,
LiHua
Possibleversionone:(128words)
DearLiHua,
I’msorrytolearnaboutyourtrouble.
Idon’tthinkyouneedtobesoupset,norshouldyoubeunhappywithyour
parents.Don’tfeelstrangeifIsayyourparentsarerightaboutthematter.Asa
teenageryoushouldlearntotakesomeresponsibilityaboutyourownfuture.Ithink
themostimportantthingyouaredoingnowistogetpreparedforthefutureby
workingbetteronyourlessons.Computerisjustatoolforbotheducationand
entertainment，whilemid-termexamisanimportantstagetotestyourlearning.
So,Ithink,forthetimebeing,youshouldputtheexambeforetheQQpet.I
suggestyouhaveagoodtalkwithyourparentsandaskthemtofeedtheQQpetfor
youforatime.
IhopewhatIsaidcanbeofsomehelptoyou.
Yours,
Peter
范文讲解
审题要点：1.先说感同身受。2.结合问题谈看法。3.总结自己建议。
一．先说感同身受：I’msorrytolearnaboutyourtrouble.
点评：回信类文章一定不要直接谈建议，而要先感同身受。
句式提升：Ifeelforyou.ActuallyIhadsimilarexperiencewithyoubutIgetoutof
thetroublenow.HereIwanttosharesomesuggestionswhichmayhelpyou.
二．结合问题谈看法：Idon’tthinkyouneedtobesoupset,norshouldyoube
unhappywithyourparents.Don’tfeelstrangeifIsayyourparentsarerightaboutthe
matter.Asateenageryoushouldlearntotakesomeresponsibilityaboutyourown
future.Ithinkthemostimportantthingyouaredoingnowistogetpreparedforthe
futurebyworkingbetteronyourlessons.Computerisjustatoolforbotheducation
andentertainment，whilemid-termexamisanimportantstagetotestyourlearning.
点评：因为是回信，而不是写信，所以要注意信中的问题，所有看法都是要基于
问题的，而不要自己想建议。所以要有对于问题的解释，比如Don’tfeelstrange
ifIsayyourparentsarerightaboutthematter.
注意：要有适当的过渡，如Ithinkthemostimportantthing….以及多样的句式，
如while……
三．总结建议：So,Ithink,forthetimebeing,youshouldputtheexambeforetheQQ
pet.IsuggestyouhaveagoodtalkwithyourparentsandaskthemtofeedtheQQpet
foryouforatime.
IhopewhatIsaidcanbeofsomehelptoyou.
点评：建议不用写太多，两点三点就可以。但要对建议给出解释。最后就是要有
一个祝愿，说白了就是“希望建议有帮助。”
优秀短语：forthetimebeing，putsthbeforesth,suggestsbdo,beofsomehelptosb
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