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阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately ,on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel .By the time they reached the lake ,Jane was so angry that she said to Tom,“I’m going to find a better spot for us to camp”and walked away. With no path to follow ,Jane just walked on for quite a long time .After she had climbed to a high place ,she turned around ,hoping to see the lake .To her surprise ,she saw nothing but forest and ,far beyond ,a snowcapped mountain top .She suddenly realized that she was lost. “Tom! ”she cried. “Help! ” No reply .If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom .Jane kept moving ,but the farther she walked ,the more confused she became .As night was beginning to fall ,Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night .Lying awake in the dark ,Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family .She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him. Jane rose at the break of day,hungry and thirsty.She could hear water trickling(滴落)somewhere at a distance.Quickly she followed the sound to a stream.To her great joy,she also saw some berry bushes.She drank and ate a few berries.Never in her life had she tasted anything better.Feeling stronger now,Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake. As she picked her way carefully along the stream,Jane heard a helicopter.Is that for me?Unfortunately,the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above.A few minutes later,another helicopter flew overhead.Jane took off her yellow blouse,thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again. 注意： 1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右； 2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语； 3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好； 4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。 范例四 But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Feeling unbearably cold and extremely exhausted, Jane was quite at a loss as to how to cope with the terrible situation. She could do nothing but keep on going to find an open place, praying that the helicopter would come again. Nevertheless, there was not a soul in sight and everything was so dead-looking. Being in the depth of despair, Jane tried in vain to keep back her tears and promised herself that she would by no means quarrel with Tom again. So weak was Jane that she lay on the ground and fell asleep again. It was daybreak when Jane woke up. To her great joy, a helicopter was just right over her head. She yelled with all her strength in a desperate attempt to free herself. This time, luckily, Jane was spotted and ultimately saved by the people in the helicopter. Then she was sent to the local police station. At the front door stood her dear husband who suffered great anxiety when Jane was nowhere to be found. Tears of joy and relief welled up as they finally held each other tightly. Jane’s yellow blouse was badly worn out but that’s no big deal. What was more significant was that they started to know that toleration would always be the best policy. 【点评】 该作文最大的亮点在于其语言的地道性。从文中使用了“at a loss”，“in a desperate attempt”，“spot”，“worn out”等词。同时，该考生的组句能力也非常出色。文章中出现了多个长句、复杂句，例如“Feeling unbearably cold and extremely exhausted, Jane was quite at a loss as to how to cope with the terrible situation.”一句中，非谓语动词是其中的亮点语法，表达了人物当时的身体状况。 值得一提的是，该篇作文中没有一处出现人物对话，但仍然保证了故事的可读性与真实感。为何？因为作者对故事的各个情境、人物的动作、心理活动等方面都进行了细致入微的描绘，代替了语言相对简单的对话，反而让文章的语言显得更书面化。这一点，值得各位考生借鉴——人物对话写得越多，意味着作文的口语程度越高，往往不太容易得分，如果犯错，却容易失分，所以不太建议用大量对话。 好友都在读： |
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