【原】四级范文真题解析3：孩子对上学的理解

Directions:

For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay based on the picture. You should start your essay with a brief description of the picture and comment on kids’ understanding of going to school. You should write at least 120 but no more than 180 words.

试题解析：

很多同学说这篇作文自己写的是手机对学生的影响，但其实不然。通过审题发现，如果只写“手机对学生的影响”则有跑题的嫌疑。因为，本文体裁要求为essay，话题为kids’ understanding of going to school，即“孩子对上学的理解”。建议本文既应写到“手机”但一定要写到“孩子对教育的理解”。

同时，建议各位准备四级考试的同学，对待任何作文的审题，都应该关注题干中的“名、动、形、副”四类词。只要围绕这四类词展开作文的写作，即可大大降低跑题的可能性。

范文：

This is a simple, funny but enlightening cartoon, in which a mother is sending her son to go to school. However, to her surprise, the youngster responds, “Why am I going to school if my phone knows everything?”

Apparently, this picture can be naturally associated with kids’ incorrect understanding of going to school. As a college student, I am convinced that it is of great necessity for any teenagers to enhance their quality and competence by receiving education in school. However, in contemporary society, it has become a trend for a host of students to acquire various useful information by cell phones or computers. Meanwhile, an increasing number of teenagers find it convenient and efficient to learn with the help of phones. A case in point is the guy in the picture. But, it is also cell phones that do not enable many students to understand the essence of education.

If youngsters intend to be talents, it is advisable for them to not only acquire knowledge, but also cooperation, diligence and communication skills. Thus, parents and teachers should educate, advocate and encourage their kids to cultivate these qualities. Do bear in mind: education does not merely mean “knowing everything”. (196词)

译文：

这是一幅简单、好玩但有启发性的图画。图画中，一个妈妈正要送自己的儿子去上学，然而使她意外的是，小孩回应道：“如果我手机什么都知道了，我为什么还要去上学？”

显然，这个图片能自然联系到孩子们对上学的不正确理解。作为一名大学生，我相信任何年轻人很有必要通过接受学校教育来提升自身的素质和能力。然而，在当今社会，很多学生从手机或计算机获取各种有用的信息，这已经成为一种趋势。同时，越来越多的青少年发现在手机的帮助下学习也变得方便高效。典型例子就是图片中的男孩。但是，也正是手机没有使得很多学生理解到教育的本质。

如果年轻人想要成为人才，他们应该获取知识，还应该获取合作、勤奋和沟通技能。因此，父母和老师应教育、撑到和鼓励他们的孩子培养这些素质。牢记：教育不简单意味着“知道一切”。

范文简析：

按照题目要求，首段为图画描述，应该从图画中的“相关人、相关物、动作、环境”等角度描述，同时应该在图画中涉及到作文的主题，即“kids’ understanding of going to school”；中间段为作文主题，各句功能依此为“图画联系主旨、观点、现象、感受、举例和弊端”；尾段各句功能为“评论、建议和号召”。