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 露西小栈 2021-10-15

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* 非数据图:【地图】

* 主要描述【比较】,也可以理解为【变化】。

* 两个年份都是过去,时态要小心。

【首先注意:两个年份都是过去,时态要小心】

# Introduction

Shown in the 2 maps is the change of the road access to City Hospital that happened between 2007 and 2010. 第一句用定语从句修饰change的时间。 Clearly, the road access will be significantly different. 第二句话概括全貌。比较形的地图题的全貌就写“区别大小”。

# Body

这个图很适合用“访客视角”(路线图)写。但是老章还是用了“混合视角”,即前两句“上帝视角”(平面图)之后,第三句开始用“访客视角”。

The most conspicuous difference results from/lies in the change of Hospital Road that two roundabouts were developed at both the south and north ends of the road. As a result of this change, the road no longer led to the hospital directly. 第一句中同位语从句描述change的具体情况。In addition, in 2010, with the bus stops that were previously on Hospital Road removed, people taking a bus – staff or patients – would no longer stop on that road, and instead, they would stop at the bus station, which are accessible from either of the two roundabouts, and went to the hospital building via the north roundabout. 这一句注意独立主格结构做状语(即主语后直接跟动词分词)

接下来这一段,老章用了纯粹的“访客视角”。同时提醒大家注意,要分段,读者才能看更清楚。

In 2010, staff who drive to work would still use the car park on the east side of Hospital Road, but the parking was exclusively for their use. The visiting public, since they would no longer be able to share the parking with the hospital’s staff, would park their vehicles on the east side of hospital building, and would use the additional access point on Ring Road to enter or exit from/leave the hospital. 

Conclusion

In light of the changes, road access, in 2010, was quite different from it was in 2007. 结尾段落就这么一句重申一下区别的大小,可以么?当然可以。

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