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专四专八作文到底怎么评阅，老师怎么给分，印象分占据主要得分点还是踩点给分？今天我们就一起来看一下专四专八作文具体的阅卷给分流程。 一直以来，由于专四专八都是上外一家独大，而且很多学校的老师根本就没办法改专四专八的卷子，所以存在很大的信息差。很多老师和公号网传的评分标准如下图：真的专四专八是按等级改分的吗？老师直接看你的作文是哪一档给个印象分就ok了吗？非也。真实的专四专八作文改分机制是这样的：从以上截图可以清晰看出，作文的赋分是按4个方面给出，即：作文的总得分就是四个维度的总分，不是20分直接打出印象分！那么，怎么才能保证作文得到较高的分数呢？很多人对于作文的印象就是，我要背好套句，模板，我要找个模板就网上套，写的停不下来的那种，但事实上真的如此吗？这种想法，只能在语言运用的那7分有用，但是很多人忽略了一个板块，缩写（summary）。很多人的缩写是5分满分只能拿2分的档次，不信你看：以下文章来源于2020冲击波专八写作，总主编邹申是专四八专家组组长，张艳莉是上外专四八改卷组副组长。所以，这些文章全是考试办公室的资料。本文选择2018年专八几篇范文讨论：People, towards aim for perfection, have different views, especially in the fol-lowing two ones. Some people thought it is useless, to aim for perfection, because it’s not achievable long term. It is a stress above them, and can easily ruin all the thing if the result is not perfect. On contrast, Some people thought it is a strategy to encourage a group, an organization to achieve their goal. From my point of view, the pursuit of perfection is unecessary, which means we should not aim for perfection. We could not deny that the pursuit of perfection may matter the final result of what you do. But this result is simply for those who are timid and lack of confidence. Honestly speaking, what you've done matters nothing. If all of your efforts you spend deserve the result, I may think that is wonderful. You don’t need others recognize action to achieve your value in the world, if you did your best, then let it be. More importantly, the so-called “perfection” is not actually existed in our life. All the records and achievements have been go through. Even those great men also did something wrong in history. （后续） 本样卷四项得分分别为2（缩写）、2.5（讨论）、1（篇章组织能力）、3.5（语言运用能力），总分9分，属于二档的不及格作文。缩写基本变成了背景描述，没有体现出材料的独立性，不能算作实质意义上的缩写。另外.缩写遗漏了原材料中的重要内容，关键人物和证据都没有出现。因此，我们在套用模板的时候一定要添加自己的内容：即在总结材料的时候，一定要结合材料本身，即哪些关键的人物提出了哪些具体的，典型的观点，想法或者意见，这些内容都应该体现在你的缩写部分，而不是千篇一律的套模板。其次，论述的内容质量不高，很多地方条理性差，第三段还存在不切题的问题。最后，语言水平偏低，有较多重大语法错误，拼写错误也出现得比较频繁，如unecessary、alway (always)。文章篇幅不足，这也会导致内容失分。To what extent should we pursue perfection?Perfection, suggesting flawless success, is such an appealing word that almost everyone is in pursuit of it. With the development of an increasingly challenging society, being perfect at assigned tasks seems only a supplement, but a necessity. However, people's opinion about this issue vary from person to person. For advocates, among which are mostly entrepreneurs, perfectionism helps to motivate their organizations to innovate and reinforce employees' performance. In contrast, challengers, such as teachers of high school, believe that perfectionism is unhelpful for it undermines students’ self-esteem and performance. In my view, since the pursuit of perfection could be a double-edged sword, we should be rather rational when pursuing for it.In the first place, perfectionism is a real strong motivation for both students and workers. The design for perfection suggests that one is well-planned and have set a high standard for himself/herself. Such a strong desire might intrigue people to break their borders and to reach levels of performance that are not previously seen as possible. Secondly, perfectionism, when implemented within a group, stands a great chance of provoking voluntary events..……本样卷四项得分分别为2（缩写）、4（讨论）、2（篇章组织能力）、5.5（语言运用能力），共13.5分，属于三档作文。缩写部分的引言采用了传统模式，太过啰唆，实际有效内容过于简单。讨论部分论述尚清楚，但是观点属于不太明确的、两边都兼顾的“骑墙派”，不太建议这种方式。讨论条理比较清晰,能够联系材料进行论证,有较强的说服力。结构方面比较清晰，但是表示作者个人观点的句子放在第一段结尾不合适。语言总体较流畅，长度达到400词以上，说明作者语言产出速度较高。语言准确性一般，有一些句法、词汇和拼写错误，如文中单下划线部分。专八战场很多人能在40分钟写完300字文章已经很厉害了，何况这个学生写出400词（至少得是15-20words/min的速度）而且他的句式和用词比第一篇厉害多了，为什么还是没有突破15分？原因还是他的缩写。他的缩写还是很多机构的套版，一两句话带过的写法，这种放之四海皆准的写法属于无效内容，没有体现自己的概括和概述能力，也没有体现材料的核心内容，所以拖了后腿。The pursuit of perfection, has always been at the cynosure of social debate. Judith Carlisle, headmistress of a high school, strongly opposed such pursuit. She claimed that highest scores are not necessary, as they do not truly reveal the students’ characteristics and high scores will suffice for better development. In addition, perfectionism cannot be achieved as a long time goal and is detrimental to students’ self-esteem and performance. However, those in favor of perfection pursuit believe that it is conducive to organization development. The success of Paul O’ Neill, CEO of Alcoa, whose leadership emphasizes perfection, has proved the effectiveness of perfection. From my perspective, perfection pursuit, it's a boom for both oneself and others, although it needs to be contained in a moderate level.On one hand, continuous pursuit of perfection can foster individual triumph as once potentials could be fully exploited. Humans are born to be lazy and such personality is by no means the key to success. Therefore, setting the goal of aiming at the best helps to constantly remind us of seeking for improvement. Jacinola Ardern, New Zealand's third women prime minister, said she would not have achieved her political dream if she was satisfied with the environment.……（后续）It is time that competitions are fears and work is increasingly demanding, but the consequences are worthwhile. On the other hand, perfectionism benefit society as well. Judith said that one reason for giving up perfection is that no one will remember you, which I disagree with. Firstly, we can make us remembered. We can be the next Jacinola Ardern who promotes feminist movement. We can be the next Obama who represents the efforts of movements against racism. Secondly, not being remembered should not be the excuse for us to abandon contributions to the society. We can be the anonymous person supporting education in underprivileged areas; we can be remembered as “patriots' defending our country. However, the shared priority of achieving the two goals mentioned is to perfect oneself as much as possible.本样卷四个方面的得分分别为4.5（缩写）、4（讨论）、2.5（篇章结构）和6（语言运用能力），总分17分，属于四档作文。缩写部分内容全面准确,行文简洁。（可以对比一下上一篇样文的缩写，这篇就是针对材料的概述和总结）作者准确地把握了两份材料的内容和关系，并且能够用自己的语言进行描述。讨论部分内容切题，讨论有条理，证据充分，有旁征博引的气势。语言运用比较流畅自然，体现出作者的英语语言驾驭能力较强。文章的不足是讨论的平衡处理得不好，即第三段的论述不够充分，如果作者能在这方面处理得当，文章有可能进入18~20分的档次。1. 信息的引源必须写清楚。是什么人提的，或者什么主义，还是什么机构提出来的，写清楚。如同写毕业论文一样，一定要写明引源，不然直接2分封顶。Pursue Perfection in Appropriate Areas and WaysIt has been heatedly discussed whether people should work hard for perfection in life. Headmistress of a girls’ school, Judith Carlisle, believes that pupils do not need to pursue a perfect score at school, since the marks do not reflect personality, and it is not achievable to constantly have high grades in long term. However, quality leaders like Bob Galvin and Paul O'Neill have used the pursuit of perfection as a strategy to make their companies successful, thus they claim that we should pursue perfection. In my view, perfectionism can be beneficial once we pursue it in right fields, and with reasonable methods.Pursuing perfection is always linked to setting high standards, which matter a lot in areas such as healthcare, manufacture industry, and technological improvement. CEO of Alcoa, Paul O'Neill’s perfectionism make workers safer, aluminum producer the most successful worldwide. Without the pursuit of perfection, the work-loss incident would have been much higher, and this would definitely be harmful to both personal security and economic interest. （后续）Vivifying the perfectionism as a strategy to lead and control organizations is effective in motivating others to reach a higher level and in motivating to conform better. And in many fields we need to constantly pursue perfection so that we can make substansive progress.……本样卷缩写、评论、结构和语言四项得分分别为4.5、4、2.5、6.5，总分为17.5分，属于四档作文。文章缩写能用自己的语言对材料内容进行简洁且准确的概述，内容选择合理,衔接自然，体现了较高的概括能力。论述部分能围绕核心话题展开讨论，条理清晰，且能联系材料中的内容有针对性地展开讨论，说服力较强。文章结构布局合理,内容长度适宜。如果作者能将表达个人观点的句子从第一段结尾移到第二段开始,结构更为理想。（测试办改卷组的要求）语言总体质量较好，虽有局部小错，但总体句法流畅多变，用词恰当，展示了较好的驾驭英语的能力。文章卷面整洁,书写流畅,基本没有涂改。这里除了缩写，还要说一个上外测试办对结构上的一个特殊要求。因为上外的改卷组老师一般默认开头段站全文三分之一（90-100words）缩写已经占了很大篇幅，所以个人观点往下挪。但是呢，雅思托福等考试，喜欢把个人观点写到第一段末尾。其实不同人写作习惯不一样，这也是专四八写作太过追求形式化而忽略主流出国考试写作要求的做法。但是幸好，这个问题没有扣分项，所以喜欢把个人主张放到第一句还是第二句，看个人喜好。1、缩写（5分）和语言运用能力（7分）上，绝大多数人都是抓后面的7分，但是很多人都是使用了类似some think that……others contend that……这种类似的句子，缩小了summary的比例，从而导致这个5分档很低!!!!!所以要想自己的写作分数更高，除了扎实语言能力，第一段尽量少用模板，多从原文梗概信息，包括细节！这个点可以救你那脆弱的5分档！ 2、summary务必注意citation，包括人名、机构名、或其他组织名。 3、结构框架的3分，大多数只要不是结构失衡，就是2分。其实这个差距都不大。即使某些同学实际考场写不完，这个结构框架也只是1分之差。关键还是你的缩写和语言质量的得分。
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