Welearn写作宝典英语二第一章、考研英语写作（二）简介PartADirections:Supposeyouwonatran
slationcontest;yourfriendJackwroteanemailtocongratula
teyouandaskadviceontranslation.Writehimareplyto1)th
ankhim,and2)giveyouradvice.Youshouldwriteabout100word
sontheANSWERSHEET.Donotsignyourownnameattheendofth
eletter.Use“LiMing”instead.Donotwritetheaddress.(10p
oints)PartBDirections:Inthissection,youareaskedto
writeanessaybasedonthefollowingchart,inwhichyousho
uld1)interpretthechartand2)giveyourcomments.Youshouldw
riteabout150wordsontheANSWERSHEET.(15points)第二章、考研英语写作（二
）评分标准5分首段描述Thechartgivesthepropotionsofdifferentkindoft
heinvestagationthatthepurposeofcollegestudentswhotakin
gfortrips.Tourismforsightseeing,drivingthierpressureawa
yandotherpurposestakeup37%33%15%.Purposeformakingfrie
ndsanddiggingouttheirindependentabilitytakeupless,abou
t9%and6%.8分首段描述Thepiechartaboveclearlyillustratedthepu
rposeofundergraduates’traveling.37%studentssaidtheytrave
ljusttoenjoythebeautyofscenery.While33%studentstho
ughttheygoingouttorelievepressure.Students’otherpurp
osessuchasmakingmorefriends,fosteringcapabilityofindep
endenceandotherreasonsrelativelyaccountfor15%,6%and9%.
11分首段描述Thepieshowsthattheproportionsofvariousreaso
nsofcollegestudents’travelling.Accordingtoit,37%ofstud
entsgotravellingaretoenjoythesceneryand33%traveltoget
themselvesoutofpressure.Anotheronethirdofstudentsareon
thepurposesofmakingfriends,beingindependentlyandsoon.
14分首段描述Thechartgivesabreakdownoftheproportionsofstudent
sfromacollegewhotravelfordifferentpurposes.Asitstands
,37%respondentstellthattheytravelforsightseeing,follow
edby33%relievingstress.Besides,thosetouringtomakef
riendsandtolearntobeindependentshare9%and6%respectiv
ely.【评分细则】第五档A节（9-10分）B节（13-15分）很好地完成了试题规定的任务。——包含所有内容要点；——使用丰富的
语法结构和词汇；——语言自然流畅，语法错误极少；——有效地采用了多种衔接手法，文字连贯，层次清晰；——格式和语域恰当贴切。对目标读
者完全产生了预期的效果。第四档A节（7-8分）B节（10-12分）较好地完成了试题规定的任务。——包含所有内容要点，允许漏掉1、
2个次重点；——使用较丰富的语法结构和词汇；——语言基本准确，只有在试图使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇时才有个别语法错误；——采用了恰
当的衔接手法，层次清晰，组织较严密；——格式和语域较恰当。对目标读者完全产生了预期效果。第三档A节（5-6分）B节（7-9分）基
本完成了试题规定的任务。——虽漏掉一些内容，但包含多数内容要点；——应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的需求；——有一些语法及词汇错误
，但不影响理解；——采用了简单的衔接手法，内容较连贯，层次较清晰；——格式和语域基本合理。对目标读者基本完全产生了预期的效果。第二
档A节（3-4分）B节（4-6分）未能按要求完成试题规定的任务。——漏掉或未能有效阐述一些内容要点，写了一些无关内容；——语法结
构单调、词汇项目有限；——有较多语法结构及词汇方面的错误，影响对于写作内容的理解；——未采用恰当的衔接手法，内容缺少连贯性；——格
式和语域不恰当。未能清楚地传达信息给读者。第一档A节（1-2分）B节（1-3分）未完成试题规定的任务。——明显遗漏主要内容，且有
许多不相关的内容；——语法项目和词汇的使用单调、重复；——语言错误多，有碍读者对内容的理解，语言运动能力差；——未采用任何衔接手法
，内容不连贯，缺少组织、分段；——无格式和语域概念。未能传达信息给读者。零档（0分）所传达的信息所使用语言太少，无法评价；内容与要
求无关或无法辨认。【关于内容要点】5分范文Thedatashowsustheviewofcollege
studentsfortourism‘smeaning.Nowadays,studentsspendmos
tofthierdailytimefortakingclass.Seldomcantheyhavechan
cetogofarplacestovisit.Theywannagotodifferentplaces
toenjoybeautifulseneryduringhaolidaysandvacationsoast
orelivestressesanddeveloptheirinnerindependence,alsomak
ingnewfriendsduringthetrip.11分范文Today,moreandmrestud
entsenrichtheirknowledgeandexperiencebytraveling.On
onehand,collegestudentsattainedenoughknowledgefro
mbooks,whichshouldbeconnectedwiththelife.Then,travel
wouldbeabetterchoice.Bytheway,duringthetravel,ap
ersoncanputasidetheirpuzzingproblemsandrelaxthemselve
s.Then,withabetteremotion,theycomebacktotheirstudie
s.Ontheotherhand,itisoursocity’srequirement.Ourso
cietyneednotonlytheknowledgeableperson,buttheoneswho
canexpresstheirideasindependently,knowingtheworldwi
delyandhavegoodrelationshipamongtheirpeers.Travelcan
helpcollegestudentsachievethem.【关于语法结构和词汇】（外刊好词好句）Justas
drones（无人机）canmakeupforpoorroads,thetheorygoes,mobile
phonescanovercomealackofwell-functioningbanks,portab
lesolarpanelscanstandinformissingpowerstationsandfree
learningappscansubstituteforpatchyeducation.（学生作品）Welive
indifferentcountries,speakdifferentlanguages,butloveis
somethingcommontousall.Buthowtoshowlovemaybedi
fferentwithdifferentpeopleindifferentcountries.（如何丰富语法结构和词汇
）例1：年轻人应该学会相互尊重。例2：大多数老年人都渴望安度晚年。【关于语言错误】14分范文Asisshownint
hechart,mobilephonesubscriptionsgrowrapidlyfrom2000an
d2008.Wecanalsofindthatdevelopingcountriesarethedri
vingforceforsucharapidgrowth.Accordingtothechart,mobil
e-phonesubscriptionnumberincreasedto8timesfrom2000to200
8,thatisfromaround0.5billionto4billion,whilesubscripti
onnumberonlyincreasedtwicefromaround0.5billionto
1billion.8分范文Asclearlyseenfromthechartthatmobile-phone
subscriptionsarebetweendevelopingcountriesanddevelopedc
ountriesfrom2000to2008.Accordingtothechartmentionedabov
e,wecanseein2000,themobilephonesubscriptionnumbersare0
.5billionindevelopingcountries,butthenumbersare0.7bil
lionindevelopedcountries.However,themobile-phonesubscrip
tionnumbersare4billionindevelopingcountriesin2008,me
anwhile,thephonenumbersarestill1billionindevelopedcou
ntries.Formyrespective,therearesomereasonsasbelow:一眼可识别的语
言错误●句子成分不完整（主要表现为缺少谓语）●句子成分多余（主要表现为连写谓语或连写句）●名词短语类错误（主要表现为冠词、单复数、
可数不可数）●常见搭配(动词短语、形容词短语和名词短语)例1：Therearemanywaystokeepfit
.Swimming,skating,climbing,jogging,andsoon.例2：Manypeople
areafraidofmakingchoices.Becausetheyfearthatwhataren
otchosenmightturnouttobebetter.例3：Quiteafewyoungpe
oplethinkthatprotecttheenvironmentisnoneoftheirbusin
esses.【关于结构和连贯性】14分范文Whydoesthisphenomenonappear?Ithinkth
ereareseveralpossiblereasonsforthis.First,witharapidgro
wthofpopulation,moreandmorepeoplecametolivewheresome
wildspecieshavebeenliving.Thenthesespecieshavetomov
etootherplaces.Someofthemprobablycannotadaptt
othenewenvironmentanddie.Second,althoughmanypeople
lookonthewildlifeastheirfriends,somepeoplemaynott
hinkso.Theycatchalotofwildanimalsandselltheminord
ertogetmoremoney.Third,withthedevelopmentoftheindus
try,thenaturalbalanceandtheecologicenvironmentaredest
royed.Thedeforestationhasbecomemoreandmoreserious.So
someofthewildlivesbecomehomelessandextinct.A节官方范文精讲Dire
ctions:YouhavejustcomebackfromCanadaandfoundamusic
CDinyourluggagethatyouforgottoreturntoBob,yourlan
dlordthere.Writehimaletterto1)makeanapology,and2)sugg
estasolution.Youshouldwriteabout100wordsontheANSWERSH
EET.Donotsignyourownnameattheendoftheletter.Use“LiM
ing”instead.DearBob,①Howareyouthesedays?②Pleasesayhello
toLizandMaple.③I’vegottosayapologytoyou,dueto
mycarelessnessandthecrammedschedulebeforeIleftCanada,
IforgottoreturntoyouthemusicCDofM.J.④Idiscoveredth
atonlywhenIarrivedhomeandstartedtounpackmyluggage.⑤Fo
rtunately,oneofmycolleaguesisleavingforyourcitynextwe
ek,andhehaspromisedtotaketheCDtoyoudirectly.⑥Also,
he’lltaketoyousomesmallgiftsfrommyfamily.⑦Allmybestwi
shes!Yours,LiMingB节官方范文精讲①Theaboveisatableshowingthevehi
cle-relatedtrafficaccidentsintheyear2005,asiscontrasted
withthoseofthecorrespondingclassesorcategoriesintheprev
iousyear.②Thereare5classesofvehicle-relatedaccident
sinthetable,dividedinaccordancewiththecausesofthea
ccidents.③Ofallthe5classesofaccidents,4havegoneup,an
donlyonegoesdownslightly,showingaworseningsituation.④Of
the4classesofaccidentsthathavegoneup,thelargest
inscaleofincrease(15%)comesintheaccidentscausedby
driverswhohavedrunkalcohol.⑤Undertheinfluenceofalco
hol,driversareliabletolosetheircontrolorevenconsciousne
ss,thuscausingdisasters.⑥Thetotalbanningofalcoholfromthedriverswhoareabouttodriveisinnatureanactiontosavelives.⑦Unfortunately,overfourhundredpedestrianshavebecomevictimsoftrafficaccidentsduetotheirowncarelessness.⑧Aconclusioncanbeeasilydrawnthatstrictobservanceoftrafficlawsandregulations,bothdriversandpedestrians,isthepreconditionandanecessityofavoidingtrafficaccidents.⑨Wheeledvehicleshavebeeninventedandproducedasahelptohumanlife,ratherthanakillerofhumanlives. |
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