山西省一模读后续写题目I recently went SKYDIVING! It''s something I''ve been talking
about doing since last year, but to be honest, it was planned su
per last minute… like within a matter of a few weeks.It all start
ed when I ran into a friend of mine walking home from a local fes
tival earlier this summer. We started chatting about what we''d bo
th been up to this summer and somehow got on the subject of both
being interested in going skydiving someday. My friend, Denny, sa
id he''d be on board if I really wanted to schedule a jump and I w
as so excited to finally have someone to go with!Later that night
, we texted back and forth and decided on our jump date a few wee
ks in the future. When the very Sunday came, we were both FULL of
excitement for our first skydiving experience. He had been bunge
e jumping before and I''d done my fair share of zip-lining, but ne
ither of us figured that either of those of experiences would pre
pare us for what we had in store.The drive there didn''t happen wi
thout a slight delay. As soon as we got off the through-way on to
the exit towards the small town where the skydiving facility was
, Denny''s car started tomake a strange noise, forcing us to pull
over on a busy interstate(州际公路).Only 20 minutes away from WNY Sky
diving (the place where we were going), we discovered we had a fl
at tyre (轮胎). At that point, I felt pretty defeated. Our schedule
d time was 4 pm — the last appointment time of the day — so I fig
ured they wouldn''t be able to wait for or delay the operations fo
r us since we were racing against the light.Para 1: We called Ame
rican Automobile Association (AAA) and hoped for the best. Para 2
: We were informed we were the final hump of the night…the "sunse
t jump".文本分析：讲述了两个孩子第一次跳伞的经历，跳伞前的谋划，前往目的地路途中所发生的波折，求助AAA帮忙修车，最终赶上
了所谓的“落日”跳伞的机会。本篇读后续写对学生而言较难的原因在于，在叙述故事背景时铺垫了太长的文本，导致主体事件在一番费力后才浮出
水面。此外，陌生词汇陌生的经历尤其是跳伞这种极限运动，让很多孩子望而却步。有所见有所为才会有所写，因此难度还是有的。续写情节发展：
Para 1: We called American Automobile Association (AAA) and hoped
forthe best.等待 AAA的焦急心理/AAA的援助(修车的过程)修好车，直奔目的地。Para 2:We were in
formed we were the final hump of the night…thesunset jump".第一次跳伞的
紧张，兴奋/跳伞过程中欣赏到的美景/难忘的经历续写下水Paragraph 1: We called American Automo
bile Association (AAA) and hoped for the best. With every passing
, excruciating minute, disappointment threatened to drown the day
''s bubbling excitement. The possibility of us missing the jump af
ter coming so close was almost unbearable. Then, suddenly, the ru
mble a tow truck sliced through the tension. With practiced effic
iency, the driver swiftly changed our tyre, reigniting a silver o
f hope. After paying for his service, we dashed into the ablaze s
unset. The moment we parked the car at the WNY, Denny and I excha
nged a look. I saw, in his eyes, our initial disappointment had m
orphed into wild anticipation. (91 words)Paragraph 2: We were inf
ormed we were the final jump of the night…the “sunset jump”.As we
soared skyward in the small plane, the anticipation only grew hi
gher and higher until finally, taking a deep breath, we leapt out
and plunged towards the earth. The adrenaline rush was unlike an
ything I had ever experienced. After the initial free fall, we we
re suspended, weightless, in an impossible sky, the world a breat
htaking panorama of pinks, oranges, and purples bleeding into the
approaching night. We were hurtling towards the ground, yes, but
we were also flying. And for a brief, glorious moment, everythin
g felt possible. (87 words)One Possible Version:We called America
n Automobile Association(AAA)and hoped for the best. The operator
informed us that they would arrange for a car mechanic to arrive
at the scene as soon as possible to assist us. As I watched the
hands of the clock ticking away, I was as anxious as an ant on a
hot pan. Suddenly, a vehicle with the AAA logo appeared in our vi
ew, At that moment, a spark of hope ignited in my eyes. After a q
uick repair, we continued on our way to our desired destination.
Finally, with the help of the car''s acceleration, we arrived at t
he skydiving facility waiting area on time.We were informed we we
re the final hump of the night…the "sunset jump".Grasping at our
last chance, we were overjoyed, but the thought of the extreme sp
ort of skydiving - something we had never experienced before - ha
d our hearts in our throats. After a round of equipment adjustmen
ts and safety checks, we finally set off on our adventure. The vi
ew before us completely took our breath away. The afterglow of th
e setting sun, the vast horizon, and the liberating air instantly
offset the trials and hardships we had experienced along the way
. If I could, I would still do it again, and even more. After all
, life is for experiencing!有用语料积累：1.时间一分一秒的拨弄，我焦急地如同热锅上的蚂蚁:As I w
atched the hands of the clock ticking away, I was as anxious as a
n ant on a hot pan.2.希望的火焰在我的眼中燃气:At that moment,a spark of hope
ignited in myeyes.3.某事使得某人心提到嗓子眼...had our hearts in our throats4.震撼:The view before us completely took our breath away.5.落日的余辉/广阔的视野/自由的空气:The afterglow of the setting sun, thevast horizon, and the liberating air instantly offset the trials and hardships wehad experienced along the way.(…抵消了一路的波折和艰辛)6.主旨:人生是用来体验的!After all,life is for experiencing. |
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