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2008哈尔滨市中考
朋友，还记得那些陪伴你左右的同桌(deskmate)吗？他们乐观向上；他们自强不息；他们诚实可信；他们勤奋好学……你的生活因他们而精彩！请通过一件事的记述，让我们认识一下你的一位勤奋好学的(hard-working） 同桌吧！ 要求： 1.请根据所提供的信息材料和话题（不要逐句翻译），写出结构严谨、内容完整、语言丰富优美、语法准确、可读性强的短文。 2.至少80词。 3.不得使用真实姓名、地名和学校名。 4.题目自拟。 写作指导 这是一篇记叙与描写相结合的文章。根据所提供的材料，首先应介绍一个人物，包括描写他/她的外貌和性格特征等；然后通过记叙一件事来展现这个人。同学们需要注意的是：在描述人物时通常用一般现在时，而记述一件事应该用一般过去时。 描写人物是大家比较熟悉的话题，但要写好并不容易。首先大家应避免写成流水帐，或用千篇一律的套话空话使文章显得索然无味。在记述一件事情时，应该选择能够给读者留下深刻印象的事例，或能够突出所描述人物性格特点的典型事例。记述时要注意语言表达的清楚准确。 最后的结尾要扣题。同学们可以对所描述的人物进行简单的评价，词汇量大的同学可以用排比句来抒情，给文章添彩。适当运用从句和连词将使文章更加流畅连贯。 下面的词汇和句型可以给大家在写作时提供一些帮助： optimistic, honest, helpful, colorful, friendly, clever, help somebody with something, get along well with, learn from, help each other. 范文1：一档文 My Deskmate During these three years, I can't go through without her help. She is my deskmate - Mary. She is a really kind girl, who never fails to make others happy. We are fascinated with her because she often helps us with our lessons. At first, I'm not very glad of sitting beside her because she is so excellent. And that will bring me too much pressure. However, one thing changed my opinion and we became close friends. That was a cold winter morning, I got a bad cold. Nobody noticed that and I felt very sad. When my deskmate knew that, she ran to the school clinic and bought some medicine for me. Then she gave me some fruit and poured hot water for me. Looking at her busy doing these things, I was moved entirely. Thanks to her help, I spent the terrible day happily. That is my deskmate. She gave me help and warmth. I feel lucky that I have such a good deskmate. She is the sunshine in my world! 点评： 这是一篇写得非常成功的文章。它用生动的语言描述了同桌的特点，恰当地运用了复合句和连词使文章更加灵活，流畅。文章通过对同桌在作者生病时伸出友爱之手这件事的描述，使文章的主人公形象更加具体，逼真。 范文2：二档文 My Deskmate Mike was my deskmate. He was tall and thin. He was clever and hard-working. And he was a top student in my class. I think he influenced me a lot. When I was in Grade One, I was not interested in Chinese. I thought it was boring. I was often absent-minded in Chinese class. When Mike found this, he often reminded me that I should listen to the teacher carefully. After class, he often helped me with my Chinese. He told me the importance of learning Chinese. He also taught me some good ways of learning Chinese. Because of Mike's help, I became more and more interested in Chinese. I got an A in the final exam. I really couldn't believe that! What great progress I made! Mike is not only my deskmate, but also my best friend. Without him, my life won't be so colorful! 点评： 从整体上看，这篇文章写得也不错。作者形象地描述了同桌的外貌与性格特征，对一件事情的记述也比较清楚。但有美中不足之处：1. 第一自然段的时态不正确，描述客观事实应该用一般现在时。2. 在记述一件事情时， “often”这个词出现的次数太多，可换成其他频度副词以避免重复。3. 在适当的地方如果能加一些连词会使文章显得更加流畅。 主题词汇和有用句型 主题词汇： 外貌：good-looking 长得好看的,pretty 漂亮的, beautiful 美丽的, lovely 可爱的,medium height 中等身高, medium build 中等身材,overweight 超重的,slim 苗条的 性格/品质：brave 勇敢的, confident 有信心的, honest 诚实的,patient 有耐心的, easy-going 随和的, outgoing 外向的,energetic 精力充沛的, forgetful 健忘的, generous 宽宏大量的, talented 有才能的, hard-working 勤劳的, helpful 乐于助人的 有用句型： Mr Green is a reporter 格林先生是一名记者 He's very kind/ polite 他很和蔼/有礼貌…… I like/enjoy doing 我喜欢做…… My hobby is... 我的爱好是…… I'm good at... 我擅长…… I'm interested in... 我对……感兴趣 My favorite subject is... 我最喜爱的学科是…… 模拟试题 初三生活将结束，在三年的初中生活当中，你遇到过很多老师，请根据你的经历，以My favorite teacher为题，写你最喜欢的一位老师。 要求：1. 写出你最喜欢这位老师的原因，条理清楚。 2. 词数在80词左右。 3. 文中不得出现真实的人名校名。 参考范文 My favorite teacher Everyone has his or her favorite teacher, so do I . My favorite teacher is Miss Wang, our English teacher. Miss Wang is beautiful. She has big eyes and curly hair. She wears glasses. Most of all, I like her because she is very kind and patient to us. Three years ago, when I started at my school, I found English very difficult. At first, Miss Wang seemed very strict. But she asked students with difficulties to her office where she helped them face to face. Little by little, I began to see she is very kind and patient. She explains everthing to us until we understand it. She never gives up on students like me who have trouble with English. She tells us not to worry and never gives up. She inspired me and makes me do my best to study English. I have made great progress over the last three years. Time flies! I'm going to graduate soon and I really want to say: “Thank you, my beloved teacher!” |
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