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social Activities and our study There are a lot of beneficial things in social activities. For example ,we can get some social experiences from social practice. As a college student, we can know about the society and it is easy to adapt ourselves to the society before we graduate. However ,the social activities are also cause a lot of disadvantages. If you spent a lot of time on social activities, you will never be able to a good command of knowledge. Therefore ,we will fail to be qualified students . In my opinion, the college students are need to take part in the social activities, but we should do it in our spare time. Thus ,we can not only learn to knowledge in school .but also benefit us in social activities. 请好心人帮忙看看这段话,有什么语法错误或者其他问题都可以指正出来.我将万分感谢. 1）beneficial things==> benifits 2）we can get some social experiences from social practice.你是想表达社会经历还是经验?是经验的话应该是experience 3）the social activities are also cause a lot of disadvantages 去掉被动,另外,建议把disadvantages换为problems 4）If you spent a lot of time on social activities, a lot of 建议换为too much, 5) you will never be able to a good command of knowledge.语法错误,没有动词 ==> you may not be able to have a good command of knowledge. 6) In my opinion,the college students are need to take part in the social activities,but we should do it in our spare time. 这一句没错,但我觉得这样写会更有文采. In a word,the college students,I believe,do need to take part in the social activities,but we should participate in our spare time. 7) Thus ,we can not only learn to knowledge in school .but also benefit us in social activities. thus==> in this situation learn to knowledge 去掉to benefit us in social activities.==>get benefits from social activities （改得比较多,希望搂主不要见怪） |
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