中考英语作文高分范文解析

请根据以下交通事故因素（factors）统计图表，以“Major causes of traffic accidents”为题，用英语写一篇简短的分析报告，向学校英语报投稿。

注意：

1.报告需逐条陈述下面pie chart和bar chart (柱状图)中呈现的主要内容。（至少5点）

2.提出你对交通安全总的看法。（至少2点）

3.词数：100词左右，所给标题不计入总词数。

【范文】

答案：

Major Causes of Traffic Accidents

Nowadays, there are always kinds of traffic accidents reports from newspaper, TV news and so on. As a result, it’s important for us to analyze the major causes. The following are two reports:

According to the pie chart, there are mainly three factors: 85% is about driver factors; 5% is from vehicle factors and 10% is environment factors. Among them, it’s quite clear that the first one is the key point. While bar chart points that there are 4 reasons to cause the traffic accident, including speeding which is 50%, drunk driving which holds 15%, tired driving which is 25% as well as not using seat-belt which is 25%.

In my opinion, everyone should keep in mind that traffic safety is one of the most ways in our life. At the same time, we should try our best to obey the traffic rules. The harder we try, the happier our life will be!

【解析】

1).审题

由短文标题及所给提示内容可判断，书写本文应以两个图所反映的内容为主，课分别表达。首先应写明主题，即there are always kinds of traffic accidents reports… So it’s important to analyze the major causes…；然后可陈述pie chart中的内容：According to the pie chart…85% is about…；接着把bar chart的内容表达出来：While bar chart points that…；最后用in my opinion引出自己的观点。书写时一般现在时为主。

2).写作思维

(1).开篇点题：it’s important for us to analyze…

(2).图表一：85%；5%；10%

(3).图表二：50%；15%；25%；26%

(4).发表观点：In my opinion, everyone should…

3).写作亮点

(1).重点短语

a). according to根据；依据

b). as well as也

c). in one’s opinion在某人看来

d). keep in mind记住

e). at the same time同时

(2).高级句型

a). Among them, it’s quite clear that the first one is the key point.

其中，很明显第一个是主要原因。

b). The harder we try, the happier our life will be!

我们越努力，我们的生活就会越快乐。

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