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英语四级写作计划第三周第4天(8):如何制造亮点词语类每日佳作赏析

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八、每日佳作赏析

Directions : For this part , you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic Young people Should Have Ideats . You should write at least 120 words , and base your composition on the outline given below in Chinese :
1.人,尤其是年轻人应该有理想。
2.理想对于一个人的意义。
3.我们应该如何实现自己的理想?

范文

(1)" What are you gong to do when you grow up ? " When I was a child , people often asked me this question about ideal . (2) Undoubtedly , every individual , (3) especially a young person , should have an ideal . (4) Hardly can we find any great people with no ideal when they were young .

An ideal (5) is of vital importance to one's growth and success . (6①) On the one hand , an ideal is the target of one's life . (7) Once you decide what your ideal is , you know (8) where to go and which way to take . (6②) On the other hand , an ideal is (9) like the engine of vehicles . (10) Only when we have our own ideals , can we find (11) the origin of energy and enthusiasm .

(12) Whatever your ideal is , careful plan and preparation (13) is vital to its final realization .(2③) Of course , the path (14) from where you are to where you want to get is not always smooth and straight . Therefore , an optimistic , positive mind is (15) indispensable in the process of your pursuing your ideal .

点评
(1)疑问句开头,新颖独特,引人注意。
(2)副词或副词短语开头,丰富了句式。
(3)意为“尤其,特别”。
(4)倒装句、否定词提前引起。
(5)“be of + n .”相当于“ be +adj ”.
(6)意为“一方面,……。另一方面。……”常用于表示列举。
(7)意为“一旦”。
(8)“疑问词+不定式”充当宾语。
(9)比喻使用恰当。
(10)倒装句,“only+状语”提前引起。
(11)意为“能量的来源”。
(12)意为“无论什么”,引导让步状语从句。
(13)意为“对……至关重要”。
(14)from…to连接的两个宾语从句的使用凸显语言功底。
(15)意为“不可或缺的”。


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