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在上期（传送门）和上上期（传送门）中，给大家分析了 cohesion 包含的三个方面：
1. transition signals
2. referencing by using pronouns 3. using substitution 今天 Shark 给大家聊一下自己在写作中常用到的两个段落组织的小技巧，用于提升句子之间的逻辑性和流畅度，从而提升雅思写作中 CC 的得分。 对想获得6.5+的同学很重要！ 技巧一：Z字型写法(zig-zag structure) 这种写法在学术写作（academic writing）中非常常见，因为经常会用到前面已经提到的信息来做后面句子的开头。
Z字型写法的操作就是用上一句末尾的信息作为下一句开头的信息，并引导出新的信息。 公式： A怎么怎么样就到了 B。 B* 怎么怎么样就到了 C。 C* 怎么怎么样就到了 D... 注：B 和 B* 可能并不完全一样，但关系肯定很密切。
如果你还没有理解，请看下图！ ▼ 
比如在剑桥雅思15第135页7分范文中 ▼ A real life example can be seen from advertisements in a particular social media platform, Youtube. In the Youtube marketing mechanism, advertisements are place before and between videos. （上一个句子结尾的信息作为下一个句子开头的信息） 再用中文来演示一下： 昨天我去听了一场演讲。这个演讲的嘉宾是著名的英语老师俞敏洪。俞敏洪是这样讲的…… 连贯性是不是很明显？但是大家也不要在一个段落中从头到尾全部这样连接，就显得很刻意。用1-2次，恰到好处是最佳方案。
技巧二：重复结构(repeating structure) 公式： A 怎么怎么样就到了 B。 A* 怎么怎么样就到了 C。 A* 怎么怎么样就到了 D... 注：A 与 A*可能并不完全相同，同义词替换和代词指代均可。
下面这篇剑桥雅思9的8分范文便是完美体现（原文有删减）：It has been suggested that high school students should be involved in unpaid community services as a compulsory part of high school programmes. In my opinion, sending students to work in communty services is a good idea.Life skills are very important and by doing voluntary work, students can learn how to communcate with others and work in a team but also how to manage ther time and improve their organisational skills. Nowadays, unfortunately, teenagers do not have many after-school activties. After-school clubs are no longer that popular and students mostly go home and sit in front of the TV, browse internet or play video games.By giving them compulsory work activities with charitable or community organisations, they will be encouraged to do something more creative. Students will also gain more respect towards work and money as they will realise that it is not that easy to earn them and hopefully will learn to spend them in a more practical way.If students have activities to do, they will not be bored and come up with silly ideas which can be dangerous far them and their surroundings.所标记出来的句子主语都是 high school students 的重复，替换或指代，有效地保障了段落的连贯性，8分范文，实至名归！旅游可以给个人和社会带来很多的好处。第一，旅游是一种很好的方式放松身心。第二：通过访问一个陌生的地方，人们也可以开阔眼界。今天分享的两个办法应该是比较简单的，可操作性也非常强，大家可以在以后的写作中多加尝试，提升自己文章 CC 的得分哦。
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