【参考译文】
1. Longjing is rich in Vitamin C and some other healthy elements. Drinking Longjing regularly helps ease tiredness and delay aging.
2. As it contains rich Vitamin C and many other health-promoting elements, regular consumption of it contributes to relieving fatigue and delaying senility.
【解析】
译文1用词简单,句式直接沿用原文。译文2将原文两句合并成一句,因为从语义上看,“富含……元素”与“助于健康”关系较密切;汉语重意合,英语重形合,故前面加上As表原因,后面第二个“龙井”以it代替,避免重复。汉语中喜欢重复,而英语中不喜欢,如培根《论读书》(Of Studies)中的名句:Reading makes a full man; conference a ready man; and writing an exact man. 英文中只一个makes,而汉语译文则需要补全三个“使”:读书使人充实,讨论使人机智,笔记使人准确(王佐良译)。
“经常喝龙井”还可翻译为frequent/regular drinking,或if one drinks it regularly。翻译“有助于”时,如不屑于用help,可选用is conductive to或is beneficial to(注意这两个to都是介词,其后的动词莫忘加-ing)。“减轻”除了译成ease与relieve,可选用的还有lessen/lighten/allay/alleviate等词。
“延缓衰老”的英文也不只delay aging/ageing与defer senility,还可译为resist/retard aging或slow/postpone the aging process;如在护肤品包装上见过anti-aging(抗衰老)一词,可大胆借用,译成has anti-aging function。仍对“延缓衰老”一筹莫展时,不妨换个角度,译成prolong/lengthen life——“延缓衰老”不就是延长寿命嘛。正如生活中的标识语:“油漆未干”译成Wet paint(湿油漆);“男士禁止入内”译成Women only(只女士可进,ban/forbid/prohibit表“禁止”的词都不必用,多省心省事)。